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-Having pierced my bosom and wrung my heart,
+Having pierced bosom and wrung heart,
-On what chariot of beauty did You depart
+Upon what cart of form did You depart
-With fire and wind toward the blue yonder...
+With fire and wind toward blue yonder,
-Into some far, far-distant star cluster?
+Unto which far-flung star cluster?
-Alone You arrived on a brilliant cascade;
+Alone You arrived on brilliant cascade;
-The riches of my heart You won and took away.
+Riches of my heart You won and took away.
-Darkness impervious was inside my mind;
+Darkness impervious inside of heart mine,
-But, with Your own hand, ignited was a golden light.
+By Your own hand lit was a golden light.
-You have left, but the scent of honey lingers;
+You have left, but honey-scent lingers;
-On the lids of my blind eyes, light-stripes are etched.
+On lids of blind eyes, light-stripes etched.
-Day or night, when there's a sweet and mild breeze,
+Day or night, on sweet and mild breeze,
-Filled with pleasant memories, Your love accompanies me.
+Love accompanies, filled with pleasant memories.
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