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-Lord, by loving me
+You, by loving me
-You have honored me.
+To me honor You've accorded.
-Certainly, judiciously, You do not look;
+Surely, judiciously, You did not look;
-For I am but the equal to a grain of soot.
+For I am the equivalent of a speck.
 In Your flower garden, there am I
-A mite of pollen, a seed vessel inside.
+A mite of pollen, seed vessel inside.
 You are more gigantic than the huge;
 While I am just an atom in a molecule.
 By fetters of attribute am I constrained;
-Beyond attribute, You are the most noble and great.
+Beyond attribute, You are most noble and great.
-I am but the tiny glow of a firefly;
+I am but a tiny glow of firefly;
-You are the tremendous sun in the far-flung sky.
+You are the huge sun in far-flung sky.
-I am the soft jingle of ankle bells;
+I'm the soft jingle of an ankle bell;
-You are the call clarion of bugles.
+You're the call clarion of bugles.
-I drift amid the splendors of Your body;
+I drift mid the splendor of Your form-sphere;
-Beyond the limits of body, You reign supreme.
+Form-free, You are He Who reigns supreme.
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