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 In a muddy pond,
 I've kept abloom a pristine lily,
-On which Your rosy feet will cross.
+On which Your rosy feet may cross.
 Come close, please come close;
 For You alone my mental lotus
 Is full of fragrance.
-I have kept my white sparkling lotus amidst chilly winds,
+Beset by wintry winds
-radiant with the beauteous rays of the sun.
+I've kept abloom a white lily,
-My lotus filled with nectar awaits you.
+Adorned with the sun.
+Come close, please come close;
+For You alone my mental lotus
+Is full of sweetness.
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