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 On the other bank of slumber, a fresh sun
 Dispelled the gloom of dark-moon's night.
-Half-awake were the inarticulate ones;
+Half-woke were those, the inarticulate;
 Their eyes did open at that time.
 The world embraced innovation;
-With a novel complexion{{#tag:ref|The Bengali word used here has a double meaning. ''Varńa'' (বর্ণে) may refer to color or to a Hindu caste. Undoubtedly, the author intended both meanings at this point.|group="nb"}} all came into sight.
+With a fresh complexion{{#tag:ref|The Bengali word used here has a double meaning. ''Varńa'' (বর্ণে) may refer to color or to a Hindu caste. Undoubtedly, the author intended both meanings at this point.|group="nb"}} all came into sight.
-In new beauty and love arose the dictum:
+With new beauty and love arose the dictum:
-This earth is our collective birthright.
+This earth's our common birthright.
-Sleeping minds were wakened and galvanized;
+Sleeping minds were roused and galvanized;
-The wanton self-interest got restrained.
+Wanton selfishness got constrained.
-Delirious pride was recognized;
+The crazed pride was recognized;
-No more was universal conscience far away.
+Global conscience, no more far aside.
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