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-Oh Lord, while we observe Your stunning game,
+Oh Lord, while we observe Your stunning games,
-Behind that screen, alone, You lie in wait.
+Behind their screen, alone, You lie in wait.
 You gave the dark of night and its carnival of stars;
-You gave the moon's smile that impulsive made our hearts.
+You gave the moon's smile that made restive hearts.
-You gave severe summers, and You gave a heat that burns;
+You gave severe summers and a heat that burns;
-You gave [http://www.seedsofindia.com/item/Jasminum-molle---Juhi-229 daytime jasmines]{{#tag:ref|Jasminum Molle is not only remarkable in that it blossoms during the day but also in that it blossoms most profusely during the hot summer months.|group="nb"}} and their fragrant garlands.
+You gave [http://www.seedsofindia.com/item/Jasminum-molle---Juhi-229 juhi jasmine]{{#tag:ref|Jasminum Molle is not only remarkable in that it blossoms during the day but also in that it blossoms most profusely during the hot summer months.|group="nb"}} and its fragrant garlands.
 You gave thorn-filled gardens, hard to perambulate;
-In them You made roses bloom at the break of day.
+And, in them, You made the rose bloom at break of day.
-How do you play so many sports alone?
+All alone, how do you play so many games?
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